A Story within a Story and Parenthetical Asides
Hi Julie,
Tomy (8years old) wrote a story after reading Navigating Early, and learning about a story within a story. The name of the story is “Owl’s Adventures.”
Owl’s Adventures with Aliens
(First Version)
Owl was walking one day looking for his house, when he walked off a cliff and forgot he could fly.
Suddenly, he disappeared. Next thing he knew, he was in an Alien Ship. The Aliens were taking him straight to the laboratory in Planet X-24, from the Galaxy of X-2000.
Then Owl disappeared again. Next thing he knew, he was in the laboratory XF5. He seemed to be inside a sticky slimy green substance. And it seemed to be making him into a liquid.
Next thing he knew, Owl the Liquid was put in a jar, and labelled Owl the Liquid. He was sent straight to the Alien Pet Store X5-2000.
A VERY strange Alien lady bought him. She was squishing him around. Then she put him back in his jar, and put the jar in her beaming machine, and he was sent straight back to the Cliff where he had been falling (remember, Owl was in a jar, and he was a liquid).
When the jar crushed onto the rocks below, the jar broke, and the next thing he knew, it was that all his liquid was running down the river!
Then Owl was so scared in that river that he yelled, “AHHHH!” That woke him up!
He was in the Raptor Center, with doctors all around him. He had broken his wing when he fell off the Cliff. He had fainted. And that was what this silly story was about.
He then added parenthetical asides to the story and created a second version of the story, while learning about parenthetical asides in the Chitty Chitty Bang Bang lessons.
Owl’s Adventures with Aliens
(Second Version)
Owl was walking one day looking for his house (Owl is always looking for his house! Read Owl’s other adventures for more information), when he walked off a cliff and forgot he could fly.
Suddenly, he disappeared. Next thing he knew, he was in an Alien Ship (I haven’t told you this yet, but the last thing that Owl has ever wanted in his whole entire life, and after, is to go face to face, or even see, or get a tiny bit of sight of any Alien or Alien activity). The Aliens were taking him straight to the laboratory in Planet X-24, from the Galaxy X-2000 (I haven’t told you yet, but Owl is terrified with laboratories, planets, and space. Although he lives on a planet, Owl is terrified of his own planet!).
Then Owl disappeared again. Next thing he knew, he was in the laboratory XF5. He seemed to be inside a sticky slimy green substance. And it seemed to be making him into a liquid.
Next thing he knew, Owl the Liquid was put in a jar, and labelled Owl the Liquid (Owl is also terrified with liquids, although he needs to drink liquids, so he only drinks a drop a day. He thinks if he drinks too much liquid, he will fall unconscious and die!). He was sent straight to the Alien Pet Store X5-2000.
A VERY strange Alien lady bought him (any time Owl sees a little bit of something strange he faints). She was squishing him around (Owl hates to be squished around!). Then she put him back in his jar, and put the jar in her beaming machine (Owl loves Star Trek, but he skips all the parts where they even talk about beaming), and he was sent straight back to the Cliff where he had been falling (remember, Owl was in a jar, and he was a liquid).
When the jar crushed onto the rocks below, the jar broke, and the next thing he knew, it was that all his liquid was running down the river! (Remember, Owl is terrified with liquids!)
Then Owl was so scared in that river that he yelled, “AHHHH!” That woke him up.
He was in the Raptor Center, with doctors all around him. He had broken his wing when he fell off the Cliff. He had fainted. And that was what this silly story was about.
We have really liked all the books (we are using last years’ Arrow), and we are having lots of fun with the program.
We just wanted to share this stories with you and thank you for your wonderful program.
Sincerely,
Patty
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